Suspicious Individual
Oct 26, 2015 10:51
Yesterday my physical condition was bad, so I slept after I went shopping and ate lunch.
Then the intercom rang, and the door opened while I was going to the entrance.
No doubt I forgot to lock the door.
I was very surprised because a stranger tried to enter my room.
The man also looked surprised, and he said "sorry, I made a mistake," then he left.
I was a little scared.
Then the intercom rang, and the door opened while I was going to the entrance.
No doubt I forgot to lock the door.
I was very surprised because a stranger tried to enter my room.
The man also looked surprised, and he said "sorry, I made a mistake," then he left.
I was a little scared.
不審者
私は昨日体調が悪かったので、買い物に出かけてお昼ご飯を食べた後寝ていました。
するとインターホンが鳴り、なんだろうと玄関に向かうと、扉が開きました。
買い物の後、鍵を閉めるのを忘れていたようです。
扉からは見知らぬ男が入ってこようとして、驚きました。
男も驚いている様子で、「すみません、間違えました」と言って去って行きました。
ちょっと怖かったです。
私は昨日体調が悪かったので、買い物に出かけてお昼ご飯を食べた後寝ていました。
するとインターホンが鳴り、なんだろうと玄関に向かうと、扉が開きました。
買い物の後、鍵を閉めるのを忘れていたようです。
扉からは見知らぬ男が入ってこようとして、驚きました。
男も驚いている様子で、「すみません、間違えました」と言って去って行きました。
ちょっと怖かったです。
No. 1 Nameless's correction
- Suspicious Individual
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- Yesterday my physical condition was bad, so I slept after I went shopping and ate lunch.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- Then the intercom rang, and the door opened while I was going to the entrance.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- No doubt I forgot to lock the door.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- I was very surprised because a stranger tried to enter my room.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- The man also looked surprised, and he said "sorry, I made a mistake," then he left.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- I was a little scared.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
kanotown
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No. 2 Chris's correction
- Yesterday my physical condition was bad, so I slept after I went shopping and ate lunch.
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Yesterday I didn't feel so well so I slept after I went shopping and ate lunch.
"my physical condition was bad" sounds very clinical, or stiff. "I didn't feel so well" sounds much more natural in this context.
- Then the intercom rang, and the door opened while I was going to the entrance.
- Then the intercom rang but the door opened while I was (still) going to the entrance.
- No doubt I forgot to lock the door.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- I was very surprised because a stranger tried to enter my room.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- The man also looked surprised, and he said "sorry, I made a mistake," then he left.
- The man also looked surprised, and he said "sorry, I made a mistake," then he left.
- I was a little scared.
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
kanotown
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :)
Thank you very much for correcting my post! :)